a girl i love - pome

التنين الاحمر · 5 مارس 2005، 14:09

Long black hair
As black as a moonless night
An eye with the color of a burnt earth
Not black
Not brown
But in between
Looking into such eyes melts the stone in my heart

Her noise is small
Small like a cheery
Cheery is the color of her cheeks
She has a smile
That never disappears from her face
Whither she is in pain or sadness

She is the girl I love

When I hear her laugh
The pain in my heart washes away
Like a wave breaks into a mountain
A mountain that in time becomes a sandy beach
A beach with no pain or sadness

I once sow her in a mall
She was carrying a crying child
What kindness does she have?
A kindness that has been away from my heart

Every tome I see her
My love to her increases
Like the loneliness of mine
Increases by every passing day

All I know is that I will die
Die alone
With my love in my heart
Should I confess my love?
But
I wish not to trouble her with my pain

I love her from all my heart
Yet
Wish her a better life
A life where I am not in
I know
If she entered my life
She will be in pain
A pain, which I wish for an enemy
Not for someone I love

By the passage of time
My heart becomes dark
Filled with anger that I fear
Fear to unleash it on someone
A friend or an enemy

Just few times
Times talking to her
The darkness within me
Disappears
To become a source of life and joy

She is the girl I love

Passage of time
I vowed that I will protect her
No matter what
I will sacrifice my life for her
No matter that
She loves me or not

Loving me
Is like a dream coming true
A dream that I know
Will never come true
That is a fact I know is true

I heard
If god loves someone
He gives him pain
God if that is true
I wish no love from no one
I wish no more pain
So stop loving me

All I wish now is her happiness
God if I may ask
If being in pain is the trade for her happiness
I wish for pain
Just don’t let that smile of her
Disappear out of her sad face
That all I wish

Because
She is the girl I love
My only love

oMaNi_AsLi · 5 مارس 2005، 16:09

Nice one ,
Talk to the moderator to create a new section 4 u to post ur poems

التنين الاحمر · 5 مارس 2005، 16:15

no need for a section for me to post my pomes

i will be satisfied if you people just read it and tell me what you think about it

جمال* · 6 مارس 2005، 1:03

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Mrs.Unfaithful · 6 مارس 2005، 13:10

What a beautiful poem, again and hope not the last !!!!i

Very nice Red Dragon… keep it up!!!!i

But I am a bit sceptical about the amount of emotions, feelings and sadness in the poem …. Especially when I see your signature

التنين الاحمر · 6 مارس 2005، 13:42

Mrs.Unfaithful كتب:

What a beautiful poem, again and hope not the last !!!!i

Very nice Red Dragon… keep it up!!!!i

But I am a bit sceptical about the amount of emotions, feelings and sadness in the poem …. Especially when I see your signature

what can i do i have been into lots of emotion stress for a year now

i some times feeel to sad for my self

(how Pathetic )

Tenderness · 6 مارس 2005، 22:46

شكرا التنين الاحمر
Good one, really enjoyed it, and as I said I am not really entitled to judge but to read and enjoy

As far as I recall this is the first time hearing a poet talking about a girl’s NOSE

and tell, why did you add this bit, saw her carrying a crying boy

All in all is good, expressing something inside of us

Thanks again dear
but please do not add more till this gets its share from members participations, I do not want to see them lose record
I am sure you got me
thanks again dear

التنين الاحمر · 7 مارس 2005، 10:06

Tenderness كتب:

شكرا التنين الاحمر
Good one, really enjoyed it, and as I said I am not really entitled to judge but to read and enjoy

As far as I recall this is the first time hearing a poet talking about a girl’s NOSE

and tell, why did you add this bit, saw her carrying a crying boy

All in all is good, expressing something inside of us

Thanks again dear
but please do not add more till this gets its share from members participations, I do not want to see them lose record
I am sure you got me
thanks again dear

about adding dont warry about it since im going to work to a place where there is no internet connection and will be back with in 10days

as for that part what you said i really dont know what i was thinking about i was just writing with no thinking

and when you read my futuer work just tell me how did it make you feel when you r reading it

Tenderness · 7 مارس 2005، 13:49

التنين الاحمر كتب:

about adding dont warry about it since im going to work to a place where there is no internet connection and will be back with in 10days
Dear brother, do not get me wrong, I only want others to interact fully with your posts, too much posts will distort others and lose concentration, I am sure you got my point
I wish you a nice and pleasant stay where ever you are going and will be awaiting your return

as for that part what you said i really dont know what i was thinking about i was just writing with no thinking

and when you read my futuer work just tell me how did it make you feel when you r reading it

Sure dear brother
I will

noor2005 · 8 مارس 2005، 8:55

great.........I really like it.........but if u just work alittle bit on the rhyme of some stanzas..........it will be better......... $$e

التنين الاحمر · 8 مارس 2005، 9:00

noor2005 كتب:

great.........I really like it.........but if u just work alittle bit on the rhyme of some stanzas..........it will be better.........

i know but this was one of first pomes thats why a part of it does not rhyme

but thanx for the advice

noor2005 · 8 مارس 2005، 10:00

التنين الاحمر كتب:

i know but this was one of first pomes thats why a part of it does not rhyme

but thanx for the advice

oh.........ok .....I see.......overall .......it is very nice....I like it.......shell I call u a poet $$-e

التنين الاحمر · 8 مارس 2005، 10:12

noor2005 كتب:

oh.........ok .....I see.......overall .......it is very nice....I like it.......shell I call u a poet

im not there yet

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