A Heart of Ice-- My first written story

    • A Heart of Ice-- My first written story

      Hi everyone, I would like to share you my first try in writing stories and I am going to post it chapter after a chapter and I hope that you will enjoy reading it and I am really waiting your comments because your commenst are very important to motivate me $$-e


      A Heart of Ice



      First Chapter
      "NO, NO, NO". "I can't believe you, you must be joking. I know you are trying to tease me as you always do. You can't leave me because I know you love me as I do in return. Did you forget all our promises? You are my heart and I am your soul!! Did you forget all that? Please tell me that you are kidding with me and you aren't going to leave me. Please stop, I can't bear listening to any more of this dirty joke. Tell me it is just a joke… It must be a joke!!!

      It was difficult for Reem to wake up from her pinky dream that brought for her life. She didn't want to believe that she is going to go back to her previous life alone without the taste of love. She tried to lie herself and that Jamal's decision is only another playful trick that he used to do when they were together.

      Reem Al-kanoon was an introverted girl with the innocence of a child that covers her soft milky face. She was very simple despite the enormous richness of the society that she lives in. she has a beautiful silky black hair, which is slipping in her little face and almost covering her sharp small eyes. There is a sight of hesitation and fear inside her, which let others never concentrate in her innocent beauty and instead neglect her as if she has never existed among them.

      She never had the love and passion of her mother because she never knew her mother and her father could hardly talk about her mother in front of her. She just knew that her mother was very beautiful from the only old picture that she had in her little box, which was covered by the red velvet, and she kept all her memories inside that little box.

      Her father was always busy and he could not take care of her while he is working so he decided to bring for her a nanny to look after her in her early childhood. Reem missed the love of her both parents and she lived most of her live inside that huge house. She was very lonely and sensitive. She was not the kind of a girl who is able to make friendship with many girls. She was afraid and shy of getting close to other girls. Yet, there was only one girl who tried to be close from the closed circle of Reem and became her only friend. Sarah is also from a wealthy family and her father is a famous successful lawyer with a great reputation in his job in the society. Sarah's mother is a very kind woman with a sweetheart and she is a great housewife who prefers to stay at home and run her house besides taking care of her youngest daughter (Sally) who is around 4 years.
      Reem was very happy to have the friendship of Sarah because Sarah was a very popular and sweet girl. She was very bold and very sure from every act she intended to do not like Reem at all, who wasn't sure about her own soul. Sarah always tries to encourage Reem to be more open with other people. Reem couldn't change her nature and she was just open with her dear Sarah. Reem always envied Sarah for her happy family because she was dreaming to have a family that will love her. She dreamt of her mother that she didn't see, except in the old picture that she had in her velvet red box. Sometimes, Reem pretended talking to her mother through the picture when she felt so lonely and miserable. She felt happy when she did that because she found her mother's old picture the safe shelter to her where she could live with her and no one interrupt their imaginative beautiful world.

      Sarah and Reem grew up and became mature adults. Both of them became more mature and beautiful. Sarah is still the same cheerful sweet girl, and Reem never changed from her nature and she is still very shy despite all the years she spent with the company of her dear friend Sarah. Reem and Sarah were like twins who cannot live without the other. They go to everywhere together and they are always in the same classes and Reem was the most happy that Sarah was always with her. They are now in their last year in high school and after this year the future will determine if they are going to be together or apart.

      Sarah: "Hey Reemy, what are you going to wear tonight for the party?"
      Reem: "I won't tell you, let it be a surprise till you will come and see me"
      Sarah: "But what if I didn't come to the party?"
      Reem: I guess; if you didn't come and leave me alone in that party, I will just kill you, so don't think of doing that to me"
      Sarah chuckled: "Am I so important to attend the party with you?"
      Reem: "You are so silly Sarah"
      Sarah: "come on. Admit now that you can not enjoy the party without me"
      Reem: "Yes, I can't go to the party without you, are you happy now? So, don't you dare to think of not coming to the party and let me alone there"

    • The beginning of the story is strong and wonderful


      Scream deal with great themes

      The absence of the most important source of love<<<her

      mother>>making her a weak character ,and loneliness

      affect her personality in a bad way

      you show us that Reem is unable to communicate with

      others ,and she has a negative side in her character.

      Moreover, She can not overcome her drawbacks


      there is a conflict between her desire and her reality ,this

      conflict is important to help the story to succeed in it's

      massage

      <<<the story ought to have amazing incidents to

      develop the the plot >>>

      YOU SHOULD COMPLETE YOUR STORY


      YOU ARE A GOOD AUTHOR

      إنشاء الله أنك فهمت شيء

      قصتك بدايتها حلوة

      تحتاج شوية أحداث مميزة عجيبة راح تنجح


      لكن تمنيت أن أحداث قصتك مشتقة البيئة العمانية وأحداث تاريخية عمانية تحورها لتخدم القصة أو رواية راح تكون أقوى لأنا راح تحمل ابعاد و جوانب أجتماعية سياسية أقتصادية

      كقصة عن اميرة عمانية تزوجت من شاب بريطاني في الحقبة الأستعمارية والتقت به في زنجبار
      نشأت بينهم قصة حب جميلة قصة تاريخية جميلت أستفد منها

      بس حبيت أفيدك .... بأذن الله لك مستقبل مشرق ...كمل باقي القصة نحن في أنتظارك

      وراك والزمن طويل

      أختك سكرة



      ممكن تشوف أخطاء باللغة معكم راح نتطور

    • سكرة البنات كتب:

      The beginning of the story is strong and wonderful


      Scream deal with great themes

      The absence of the most important source of love<<<her

      mother>>making her a weak character ,and loneliness

      affect her personality in a bad way

      you show us that Reem is unable to communicate with

      others ,and she has a negative side in her character.

      Moreover, She can not overcome her drawbacks


      there is a conflict between her desire and her reality ,this

      conflict is important to help the story to succeed in it's

      massage

      <<<the story ought to have amazing incidents to

      develop the the plot >>>

      YOU SHOULD COMPLETE YOUR STORY


      YOU ARE A GOOD AUTHOR

      إنشاء الله أنك فهمت شيء

      قصتك بدايتها حلوة

      تحتاج شوية أحداث مميزة عجيبة راح تنجح


      لكن تمنيت أن أحداث قصتك مشتقة البيئة العمانية وأحداث تاريخية عمانية تحورها لتخدم القصة أو رواية راح تكون أقوى لأنا راح تحمل ابعاد و جوانب أجتماعية سياسية أقتصادية

      كقصة عن اميرة عمانية تزوجت من شاب بريطاني في الحقبة الأستعمارية والتقت به في زنجبار
      نشأت بينهم قصة حب جميلة قصة تاريخية جميلت أستفد منها

      بس حبيت أفيدك .... بأذن الله لك مستقبل مشرق ...كمل باقي القصة نحن في أنتظارك

      وراك والزمن طويل

      أختك سكرة



      ممكن تشوف أخطاء باللغة معكم راح نتطور


      Thanks dear for your lovely comments and regarding your comments about writing if first about the Oman environment i already thought about it but i decided just to take a chance in writing so i could continue in future and write about stories from our society if this story succeeded. So, I promise you inshallah my next story will be about OMAN society.
      However, in this story I decided to let be from Arab Environment and you may read some events and incidents that will let you say it is not existed in our Arab world but it is existed in some parts.
      So, I hope you will enjoy the rest of the story. I will post now the second Chapter and waiting again your lovely comments. :)

    • Have Fun and I am waiting your comments.



      Chapter Two
      At a party celebrating the NEW YEAR.

      Sami: "Jamal what happened to you and Dara today? I saw Dara today and she was totally out of control. She didn’t even notice me when she passed me by".
      Jamal: "I think she is angry because I decided to leave her. I got bored of her and from her mean actions. Can you believe that she wants me to commit to her and belong to her forever? I can't imagine myself a prisoner for any woman. I will be always the master of my soul and heart".

      Sami: "maybe one day a girl will capture your soul and your heart and you will be glad to be her prisoner in her little heart".

      Jamal laughing loudly: "hahahah, stop saying such nonsense Sami and let us enjoy this party and look for some pretty girls around. Let us enjoy celebrating the new coming year.

      The party was still in the beginning and all the attendants inside the party were very excited and happy and they dressed in a well look. The party was set up in a luxurious hall to celebrate the new coming year. All the important characters of the society with their families attended the party. The wives were happy to meet together inside the party and each woman was trying to show off her beautiful dress and talking about the designers who designed their dresses besides the glittering jewelry. Men will never forget their business, so they involved themselves to talk about their last 1projects and their plans for the New Year besides talking about politics and who was suitable to be involved in this huge tricky world. Girls and boys try to search for a suitable companion to dance or chat with. At the same moment, Reem was standing at a corner and she was wearing a silky long dress. She was like a fresh blossomed rose in the morning. She was looking so beautiful in the silky red dress. She kept looking at her golden watch to see the time that her friend Sarah was supposed to arrive. She started to feel bored because she was alone like a picture on a wall and she felt like a stranger and that everyone in the hall was starring towards her
      Reem is getting worried: "what’s happened to Sarah? She promised me to come. I am sure she will come soon because she can't leave me alone in this boring party. Suddenly a tender voice cut off her thoughts and asks her gently: "May I have the pleasure to dance with the most beautiful rose in this hall?"

      Reem Stammered and was really shocked for this sudden offer. She couldn't imagine that a handsome gentleman can ask her to dance with him. She was totally blissful and she couldn't describe her real joy at that moment.
      Reem nodded her head and with a weak voice could hardly be heard "Yes".
      ‎
      ‎Jamal: "Thank you my lady, lets go…‎"
      ‎Reem: "No, I said yes, what do you want, not yes to your silly question"‎
      ‎JAMAL: "Thanks, anyway" –looking away for sometime, then he started starring at her again ‎
      ‎ "What are you waiting for anyway? Your boyfriend?"‎
      ‎REEM: "that is none of your business".‎
      ‎JAMAL: "Just curiosity, a pretty girl just standing alone and does nothing in a new year Eve party?"‎
      ‎REEM: "curiosity killed the cat, be careful"
      ‎JAMAL: "What if the cat is totally happy to die, for this piece of information?"
      REEM smiles, "okay then go ahead and die, she turned away facing the other direction to avoid his handsome look, pretending she had no interest and searching for something else!‎
      ‎Jamal was Coming from behind, whispering in her ear, "don’t you think a dying cat deserved to be granted his ‎‎last wish?‎"
      ‎REEM said insistently: "Can you please just go away?‎
      ‎Jamal: "I will, just grant me my last wish, dance with me till your boy friend show up, okay, then I promise I ‎‎will go, the dirty cat will die, and be in the past!‎
      ‎Reem talking to herself: "There is no sign of Sarah, why did she let me to be in such a silly situation". She turns around, to face Jamal, "but I don’t know how to dance"
      ‎Jamal replied happily: "I will take that as “Yes”, I don’t know how to dance also, but we can pretend, fool all these people, ‎‎just give me your hand and I will show you how you can pretend dancing, I’m good at it, trust me‎
      ‎Reem smiles shyly and She gives him her hand, "You’re crazy, I don’t even know your name‎
      ‎Jamal: "We have plenty of time for that‎ and You will know my name, my cat's name my dog's name my…. Reem giggled and interrupted him: Ok stop talking now I can't stop laughing".
      ‎Sarah just entered.‎
      ‎
      ‎Sarah: "wow look who is dancing" ‎

      ‎Jamal: "my name is Jamal"‎
      ‎Reem: "I suppose it is my turn to introduce myself, I am Reem!"‎
      ‎Jamal: "You have a beautiful name just like your beauty"
      ‎Reem blushed: "Thanks" ‎

      ‎Turning around, Reem saw Sarah, waved to her, hiding her face behind Jamal’s face‎

      ‎Jamal: "are you hiding, what is going on? Your boyfriend is here already?‎"
      ‎Reem: "yes, don’t you see him, there by the entrance, with the red dress just like my dress's color".‎
      ‎Jamal: "okay, but we just started dancing, we can’t stop, what will people think of us?"‎
      ‎Reem: "sorry we have to stop, by the end of this song, I can’t leave her alone, and she is my best friend".‎
      ‎Jamal: "how about me?"‎
      ‎Reem: "come with me I will introduce you to her".‎
      ‎
      The song was over and Reem took his hand and walked straight to Sarah. ‎
      ‎Sarah’s mouth widely opened, Reem gave here a hug and whispered in her ear, "for God's sake close ‎‎your Mouth".‎

      ‎Sarah: "sorry, I’m half an hour late, to come and find you with a very handsome guy".‎
      ‎Reem: "Jamal this is my best friend Sarah, Sarah this is Jamal, he was teaching me how to dance" ‎
      ‎Sarah: "really, I think I need some lessons too, if you’re not tired we can start right now"‎
      ‎Reem is kicking Sarah to stop her for going further more in her silly comments. ‎
      ‎Sarah: "Oh my God, sorry I think I’m tired why don’t we sit?"‎
      ‎Jamal: "I have my table over there if you don’t mind you can join me"‎
      ‎Sarah happily: "a handsome man with a table in a New Year eve what more could we ask for?"‎
      ‎Reem: "forgive my friend she doesn’t mean it, we can’t spoil your evening with your friends..." ‎
      ‎Jamal interrupting her: "I don’t have any friends in the party, and I’m not expecting anybody, please give me the honor of ‎‎your company".‎
      ‎Sarah complaining: "hey guys come on, I need to sit down, please Reem, we can discuses whether to sit down or not ‎‎while sitting down, and maybe we can also talk about my first dancing lesson. Follow me"‎

      ‎The three of them are now seated quietly in a small round table.‎

      ‎Reem: "where were you, why were you too late?"‎
      ‎Sarah: "not now Reem, not now, but aren’t you happy I’m late? And did you miss me a lot"‎
      ‎Reem is kicking Sarah again from under the table.
      ‎Sarah: "Oh, I think, I must go to the ladies room, excuse me".‎
      Reem couldn't believe that Sarah left her alone with Jamal and she was staring towards Sarah till she vanished from her sight.

      ‎Now the two of them are alone, sitting in the same table, looking at each other just as if there is nobody ‎‎around, despite the crowd and the loud music. The lights in the hall turned to stars, people dancing ‎‎around to clouds passing by and their faces as moons. The waiter came and gone, Sarah also came and ‎‎she has been sitting for almost 15 minuets,‎
      ‎
      Sarah: hey guys can I say happy new year and congratulation, you both in the Genesis records already, ‎‎you have been looking at each other for one year.‎
      ‎Reem: yes Sarah, what did you say, you want to eat?‎
      ...
      ...

      Jamal was an expert in talking and the way he handled the conversations and let others enjoy his interesting conversations. Sarah and Reem enjoyed the whole party while Jamal was with them. Reem started a little bit to feel comfortable being at the same table and started talking with Jamal. Sarah was happy to see that her dear friend changed from her shy nature to a friendlier one. Sarah was talking to Jamal and she used her hands a lot to describe her actions and she was so funny that it made Reem to laugh loudly in front of Jamal. Jamal was happy to see that Reem started a little bit to accept him.

      Jamal: “I really enjoyed talking to the two most beautiful roses in this party”
      Sarah giggled and said: “I am afraid by describing us by roses you will stick on us”
      Reem blushed and could not say any word.
      Jamal pointing his eyes to Reem: “Can I see you again?”
      Reem was intending to refuse when Sarah interrupted her by saying: “we will be glad to meet you again, right Reem” and she winked.
      Reem: “We can’t meet you because we are very busy and we are very close from final exams. We are in our last year and we have to study well”
      Sarah felt sad when Reem talked.
      Jamal: “Of course you have to study well to join the university but you have to give yourself some rest. You should balance your life between studying and having fun”
      Reem felt angry because she didn’t know how to get rid of Jamal’s offer.
      Sarah happily: “I agree with you and I always tell Reem that we should have some fun instead of studying all the time”
      Jamal: “Ok, let me suggest you something that you can not resist. We are going to have some activities in our university after two weeks, so why don’t you come to watch these activities. We have different activities and I am sure you will enjoy and never regret coming. Besides, you are going to have a special excellent guide” and pointed at himself.


      Wait the next chapter
      Scream

    • oh a very interesting story
      I read only the first chapter because i"m busy just now I can't continue
      but i promise you i wil lcontinue
      regarding the first chapter i like the beginning because i thought Reem had a boyfriend and he was about to leave her
      but I discovered later on the opposite

      really good story the ending explains the beginning
      i'm eager to read the rest of the story

      Gooooooooooooooooood luck

    • عروبة كتب:

      oh a very interesting story
      I read only the first chapter because i"m busy just now I can't continue
      but i promise you i wil lcontinue
      regarding the first chapter i like the beginning because i thought Reem had a boyfriend and he was about to leave her
      but I discovered later on the opposite

      really good story the ending explains the beginning
      i'm eager to read the rest of the story

      Gooooooooooooooooood luck


      Thanks dear a lot for having time to read a part from my story. i am really glad and that gave me hope that there are somebody still interested to read the rest of the story.

      Scream

    • First,You actually mix tragedy and comedy in this story….

      Nowadays , the readers like reading this sort of writing


      Second, You use dramatic irony , it make me sympathize

      With Reem.

      In fact, using dramatic irony attracts the readers


      Third, there is no exaggeration to say that you have the

      talent to write and describe

      شوف أخي و أختي لا تنتظر التشجيع من أحد .أنت تمتلك الموهبة

      وراح تكو ن مبدع.... .بأذن الله

      أتمنى أن القصة الجديدة تشوف النور قبل الدراسة عشان أقرئها بتمعن

      لكن راح أكون متواصلة معك دوما.. .و..أبدا




      و راح أكون أول جمهورك.
      أختك ......سكرة

    • :)
      !!!!Nice Start

      You have it in you, scream
      You can write ... and very effortlessly i can certainly tell

      :)


      :I have a very small comment
      I thought the introduction was a little misleading at first
      ???who is Jamal
      ??How did she meet him
      ??why is he breaking up with poor Reem
      Where is he until now!!!!i

      But then i changed my mind
      :)

      After finishing the first chapter, i found myself more excited in continuing with the other chapters... you have made us curious and impatient to continue to read your story, by giving us a glimpse of the future !!!!i

      I truly liked that

      Yallah.. hurry up with the next chapter

      :)

    • Thanks dear skerat albanat and Mrs unfaithful for your lovely comments. I will post 3 chapters for the weeked :) because I am not going to show up during the weekend. I have a busy weekend with weddings #e .

      Here they are,

      Chapter Three

      Reem and Sarah went to Jamal’s university and Jamal show them every part in the university. They spent a good time and they had a lot of fun. Reem was laughing most of her time and she was extremely happy. Jamal invited them to a café in the end of the activities and asked them how they found the university.
      Sarah: “I am so excited to join the university. I want to study law and become a successful lawyer just like my dad”.
      Jamal: “That is great Sarah; I know that you will be a good lawyer and have a bright future, what about you Reem, what do you want to be?
      Reem was shocked that she could not have an answer for this question and she said with a hesitated voice: “I am not sure, my father still didn’t tell me what I should do after I graduate from high school”
      Jamal interrupting her: “It is your dream Reem not your father’s dream. You are the one who should decide what you want. It is your own future and you should build it by yourself”.
      Reem: “My father is going to decide the better for me. He wants me to study management and help him in future in running his companies”
      Jamal: “But do you really want to do this”
      Reem shook her head: “I really don’t know”
      Sarah: “Reem, didn’t you tell me once that you like writing a lot and you always write in your diary”
      Reem said with sorrow: “I like writing so much because it is my shelter” and she stopped talking.
      Sarah: “But Reem you are so good in writing and I think you will be a good writer, don’t you want to be a good writer”
      Reem: “Of course I do, of course I do Sarah, but I can not tell my father about this”
      Jamal: “You have to face yourself Reem before facing your father. You have to be strong and be very sure about every step you take in your life”

      Sarah and Jamal planted the confidence in Reem’s heart and she was happy to think again about her own dream but she was afraid of facing her father.

      Jamal kept visiting Reem and Reem started to feel happy every time she sees him. He even helped Sarah and Reem in their studies and was encouraging them to do well in their final exams.

      Finally Sarah and Reem screamed happily to finish the last final exam for both of them in high school. They were extremely happy and could not express their joy.

      Chapter Four

      Jamal opened the key of happiness for Reem. Reem took the key and tasted the sweet and delicious taste of happiness and the intoxicant sensation of being in love. For Reem, this sensation that she had was like a paradise to her because she had being alone all her life and she never knew that life is so sweet with love. She wished that she would be a prisoner forever in Jamal's heart and never woke up from this beautiful dream. Jamal met a lonely, introverted Reem and changed her to the beautiful Reem full with energy and joy.

      Reem looked more attractive with her sweet smiles whenever she was with Jamal. Jamal rebirth the life in Reem's character when she was almost becoming like a faded rose. And Jamal also killed and stab her bitterly when he decided time to break with her.

      "Sorry Reem, I can't stay with you any more and I have to leave very soon,” Jamal said firmly and full of sorrow.
      "Why, why Jamal?!" Reem cried bitterly.
      "It is not your fault, it is the fault of fate that gathered us and will separate us again. It wasn't your fault at all. You are so sweet, so beautiful, and sensitive like a soft rose. You are so kind, and you are so innocent and honest and,"
      "So why?! For heaven's sake tell me why you are leaving me, why do you want to kill me!!! Why, why Jamal, just tell me why?

      Jamal couldn't bear watching the precious tears of his Reem dropping from her beautiful eyes and deform the beautiful features of her beautiful face. Jamal couldn't talk and he was chocked and couldn't tell her why. He felt guilty for seeing that he was killing this lovely rose and he said inside himself: "I don't deserve you my sweetest love, I don't deserve you and I am sorry to let you fall in a loser’s love. You deserve somebody better than me my dearest Reem"

      Jamal left quickly and never tried to stay longer with Reem. He even couldn't look back and see her because he was afraid that he will be weak and could never leave her but he was obliged to continue what he was determined upon.

      Sami: “Jamal, did you lose your mind! How could you leave your parents home? We are very close from our final exams and it is our last year in university. Do you want to end up your future?”
      Jamal: “I can pass my exams without being with my family. I can not return home again because I argued with my father and he called me loser, so I am not going back again to that home”
      Sami: “but how are you going to manage your life?”
      Jamal: “Don’t worry about me; Jamal can always get from critical problems”
      Sami: “But what happened between you and your father?”
      Jamal: “as usual, he started to reproach me and compared me to my eldest brother by saying the he is better than me and he is more responsible than me, he called me a loser and that I can not live without his money. So, I got out from home. You could say it is a kind of challenge between me and my father”
      Sami: “What are you going to do after we graduate? You need your father to help you,”
      Jamal interrupted him angrily: “you are wrong, I don’t need my father and I could depend on myself. I am going abroad and I will find a good job for myself. I will return here and prove to my father that I am not a loser”
      Sami: “Are you out of your mind? Why you need to go abroad? Why don’t you start your career here in your own country? There are many opportunities for you here, so no need to go abroad, unless you are trying to escape from your father!! I don’t know what to tell you. You are so stubborn and you will never change your mind”
      Jamal: “there is something I feel sorry about. I hurt Reem so bad and I never intended to hurt her at all. But I have to leave her for she can not leave with a loser”
      Sami; “You’ve really changed Jamal, I have never seen you care about others”
      Jamal: “Reem is not just anyone. She is different and she really changed me because of her innocent nature. I am really sorry that I broke her heart, I am really sorry. I didn’t at all mean to hurt her, I didn’t,”
      Jamal sobbed bitterly.



      Chapter Five

      Reem was totally in a different world from people around her. She has a broken nerve and nobody could help her to get from that case even her close friend Sarah. Sarah tried to spend much time with Reem to let her get out from that severe case, but she was not able to make her speak or stop crying. Reem was just silent and her silence made her father felt worried about her case. He took her to many hospitals and the only answer cure for her case was that Reem is the only one who could heal herself of her broken nerve.

      Reem’s father: “My little child, talk to me. What is wrong with you? Tell me what you want me to do for you. I can not stand it seeing you in such a miserable way”
      Reem kept silent and didn’t even look in her father’s eyes when he was talking to her.
      Reem’s father: “Ok my child, I will leave you with Sarah. Please Sarah, take care of her”

      Sarah nods her head “Ok, my uncle. Don’t worry! I will never leave her alone”

      Sarah crying: “Please Reem, talk to me. Say anything. Shout, scream, but don’t keep silent. Please Reem, for God’s sake! Don’t do this to me. It is my fault that I let you like Jamal, it is my fault”
      Reem didn’t say anything and she just kept silent and was holding her mother’s old picture close from her chest.
      Sarah moved from her place and went towards the cupboard where Reem put her diary there. She opened the cupboard and took the diary and a pen and gave it to Reem.
      Sarah: “I know that you like writing. I don’t want you to talk now but write Reem; just write because I know that you always like to write when you feel miserable”.
      Reem looked at Sarah and she wanted to tell her something but she couldn’t, and she just took the diary from Sarah. Sarah felt happy that Reem took the diary from her because she knew that Reem could get better through writing in her valuable diary. Sarah left Reem in her room and with a slight hope that she could find her better next day.



      “I have once a dreamt that I can fly high on the sky and swim through the clouds exploring the stars and play with them; but I fell down from the clouds and vanished like the clouds when it vanished, for the sun came and penetrate through its parts and separate each part of the cloud. It was like a horrible nightmare that killed all my wishes and dreams and dispersed around the place”

      Reem kept writing in her diary till she finally felt tired and slept like a child who was crying bitterly because he missed his mother.

      Reem woke up and felt that she wanted to write again so she took her diary again and started to write.

      “I should be strong like a huge mountain and face all the enemies. I should be strong to conquer all my enemies. I should be strong to wake up from this horrible nightmare and follow my dream. I should be strong to scream and shout in Jamal’s face and everyone who is just like him. I will not bestow my heart to anyone again. It is my heart and I will refuse to give it to anyone, nobody will have my heart again!!!”

      Reem sobbed bitterly and decided it to be the last time to shed her precious tears for someone who never deserved her and she slept again.


      Wait the next chapter on Friday evening inshallah :)

      your sister
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    • Sorry if i am late


      here is the Sixth parts as I promised


      Chapter Six

      On the next day, Sarah came to visit Reem and was hoping that she would find that same old Reem that always welcomed her with a pretty smile. Sarah exhaled deeply and knocked the door of Reem’s room. A firm answer came from inside the room telling her that she could come in. Sarah was shocked and happy at the same time. She couldn’t believe and she opened the door quickly and ran towards Reem and hugged her tightly. Sarah was crying happily and she was glad that her friend finally talked and Reem also cried with her.

      Sarah: “NO please, I don’t want to see your tears again. I am crying because I am happy and I missed you so much”

      Reem crying again: “I am crying because I missed you too and you are the only one in this world who loves and cares about me. I love you so much my dearest Sarah. I don’t want to fall in love again. I don’t want to know anyone else…”

      Sarah couldn’t stop crying and she hugged Reem again: “My dear Reem I will never leave you and we will always be best friends”.

      Sarah stayed with Reem for the rest of the day and they talked and talked. Sarah helped Reem a lot to get out from that dilemma. She tried to let Reem forget Jamal by telling her different things and she was telling her many jokes in order to let her smile and laugh as they used to do. Reem was trying hard with Sarah and she could only smile hardly but she couldn’t laugh. When she wanted to laugh she suddenly gloom because she remembered her loud laughs and giggles when she was with Jamal.

      Reem tried very hard to pretend smiling and that she forgot Jamal. She didn’t want to bother Sarah more by her grieves. Sarah didn’t leave Reem at all and she was visiting her everyday and if she couldn’t visit her she called her many times.


      ‎Now Reem is in a better shape to focus in her future, so she decided to talk to her father about here ‎‎final decision. Her father was in the office, with a slow step and a fast heart beat, she walked to the ‎‎office door. Full of hesitation she stood at the door for almost 5 minutes thinking to knock or not. ‎‎Finally she had the courage to knock, she knocked softly and there was no answer. Again she tried but ‎‎harder this time; the answer came from inside “come in”. She opened the door slowly peeped her head ‎‎inside, "ahh ,,,good evening father, sorry you look very busy,,,, I will come some other time …Okay ‎

      ‎Reem’s father raised his head as soon as he heard Reem, ,,, "No, No I’m not busy please come in", ‎
      ‎He knew beforehand she would not come to his office unless there is something important!‎
      ‎He pointed to her to come in and sit in the chair opposite to his desk.‎
      ‎"How do you feel today my little angel?"
      ‎‎"I'm great, thank you dad"
      ‎ ‎"I'm glad to hear that" ‎
      ‎"I want to say something, if you don’t mind?"‎
      ‎"I'm listening to you my dear, go ahead‎"
      ‎"I, I've been thinking, actually thinking a lot about my future"‎
      ‎"What do you mean your future, and he left the disk and walked around to sit close to her, yes please tell ‎‎me, I’m listening?"‎ ‎
      "I mean, soon I will join the university and I want to tell you what I have decided to study and what I ‎‎want to be in the future".
      "That is fine and what do you want to be?‎" ‎I, I, of course after your permission, I want to be a Writer"
      ‎ ‎Her father kept silent for a moment, but it was like an hour for Reem, she was afraid of his reaction, on ‎‎the other hand, she was eager to hear his comment.
      ‎"That is great, I have absolutely no objection and I will be proud of you, proud of my daughter the famous ‎‎writer, that is really great"‎ ‎Reem was shocked of his answer, that she could not believe its her father’s answer.‎ ‎She screamed of joy, "Really father you don’t mind?"‎
      ‎"Why should I mind, its your own decision and your own future and I am glad that you finally become ‎‎independent and able to take your own decision".‎
      ‎Reem ran towards her father and she printed a soft kiss in his cheek,,,, "thank you, thank you so much" ‎

      ‎ He was glad to see her smiling again and then absentminded for a moment thinking about her mother ‎‎and all a sudden his face changed and frowned. Reem noticed the change in his mood and asked him, “‎‎What is the matter father, are you OK?”‎

      ‎“I am OK, Just busy and I have to work hard to finish all these papers in front of me” ‎ ‎She felt sad because her father returned to his old nature and never cared about her presence. As she was ‎‎leaving, walking towards the door, suddenly she turned and asked her father a question he was ‎‎expecting from her since long time, “Father, why you don’t talk about my mother? Why you don’t like ‎‎to say anything about her in front of me?”‎

      ‎His face was colored and he didn’t know how to answer her question, so he ignored her and kept ‎‎looking towards his papers. ‎

      ‎Reem couldn’t bear herself from crying and she asked her father again begging him, “why father, why? ‎‎I am now old enough and I have the right to know everything about my mother. I don’t have any ‎‎memories about her except the old picture. At least tell me how she was, what she liked and what she ‎‎didn’t like and how was she? Please father tell me something, anything but don’t ignore me”.‎

      ‎“ I am just trying to protect you by not speaking about her in front of you”‎
      ‎“Protect me!! How you can protect me from my own mother?! I don’t understand, how, how?”‎ ‎" I didn’t want to deform the only memory of your mother” Her father started to talk angrily, “ Do you ‎‎want me to tell you that your mother runaway with another man. Do you want me to tell you that your ‎‎own mother is a bad mother and she left you for another man. Tell me, are you happy now?”‎

      ‎Reem couldn’t believe what her father just told her and she was frozen in her place. She tried to scream ‎‎“That is not true”. This news shocked her violently, her head became very heavy like a stone and ‎‎she saw her father moving his mouth but she couldn’t hear him. She tried to listen to what he was ‎‎saying but she felt a terrible headache and in a moment she couldn’t see her father anymore. ‎

      ‎“Reeeeeeeeeeeem”, he ran quickly to hold her hand..‎
      ‎“ Reem,,,Talk to me my child. Talk to me my dear” there was no respond from her, so he took her ‎‎quickly to the hospital. ‎
      Chapter Six


      On the next day, Sarah came to visit Reem and was hoping that she would find that same old Reem that always welcomed her with a pretty smile. Sarah exhaled deeply and knocked the door of Reem’s room. A firm answer came from inside the room telling her that she could come in. Sarah was shocked and happy at the same time. She couldn’t believe and she opened the door quickly and ran towards Reem and hugged her tightly. Sarah was crying happily and she was glad that her friend finally talked and Reem also cried with her.

      Sarah: “NO please, I don’t want to see your tears again. I am crying because I am happy and I missed you so much”

      Reem crying again: “I am crying because I missed you too and you are the only one in this world who loves and cares about me. I love you so much my dearest Sarah. I don’t want to fall in love again. I don’t want to know anyone else…”

      Sarah couldn’t stop crying and she hugged Reem again: “My dear Reem I will never leave you and we will always be best friends”.

      Sarah stayed with Reem for the rest of the day and they talked and talked. Sarah helped Reem a lot to get out from that dilemma. She tried to let Reem forget Jamal by telling her different things and she was telling her many jokes in order to let her smile and laugh as they used to do. Reem was trying hard with Sarah and she could only smile hardly but she couldn’t laugh. When she wanted to laugh she suddenly gloom because she remembered her loud laughs and giggles when she was with Jamal.

      Reem tried very hard to pretend smiling and that she forgot Jamal. She didn’t want to bother Sarah more by her grieves. Sarah didn’t leave Reem at all and she was visiting her everyday and if she couldn’t visit her she called her many times.


      ‎Now Reem is in a better shape to focus in her future, so she decided to talk to her father about here ‎‎final decision. Her father was in the office, with a slow step and a fast heart beat, she walked to the ‎‎office door. Full of hesitation she stood at the door for almost 5 minutes thinking to knock or not. ‎‎Finally she had the courage to knock, she knocked softly and there was no answer. Again she tried but ‎‎harder this time; the answer came from inside “come in”. She opened the door slowly peeped her head ‎‎inside, "ahh ,,,good evening father, sorry you look very busy,,,, I will come some other time …Okay ‎

      ‎Reem’s father raised his head as soon as he heard Reem, ,,, "No, No I’m not busy please come in", ‎
      ‎He knew beforehand she would not come to his office unless there is something important!‎
      ‎He pointed to her to come in and sit in the chair opposite to his desk.‎
      ‎"How do you feel today my little angel?"
      ‎‎"I'm great, thank you dad"
      ‎ ‎"I'm glad to hear that" ‎
      ‎"I want to say something, if you don’t mind?"‎
      ‎"I'm listening to you my dear, go ahead‎"
      ‎"I, I've been thinking, actually thinking a lot about my future"‎
      ‎"What do you mean your future, and he left the disk and walked around to sit close to her, yes please tell ‎‎me, I’m listening?"‎ ‎
      "I mean, soon I will join the university and I want to tell you what I have decided to study and what I ‎‎want to be in the future".
      "That is fine and what do you want to be?‎" ‎I, I, of course after your permission, I want to be a Writer"
      ‎ ‎Her father kept silent for a moment, but it was like an hour for Reem, she was afraid of his reaction, on ‎‎the other hand, she was eager to hear his comment.
      ‎"That is great, I have absolutely no objection and I will be proud of you, proud of my daughter the famous ‎‎writer, that is really great"‎ ‎Reem was shocked of his answer, that she could not believe its her father’s answer.‎ ‎She screamed of joy, "Really father you don’t mind?"‎
      ‎"Why should I mind, its your own decision and your own future and I am glad that you finally become ‎‎independent and able to take your own decision".‎
      ‎Reem ran towards her father and she printed a soft kiss in his cheek,,,, "thank you, thank you so much" ‎

      ‎ He was glad to see her smiling again and then absentminded for a moment thinking about her mother ‎‎and all a sudden his face changed and frowned. Reem noticed the change in his mood and asked him, “‎‎What is the matter father, are you OK?”‎

      ‎“I am OK, Just busy and I have to work hard to finish all these papers in front of me” ‎ ‎She felt sad because her father returned to his old nature and never cared about her presence. As she was ‎‎leaving, walking towards the door, suddenly she turned and asked her father a question he was ‎‎expecting from her since long time, “Father, why you don’t talk about my mother? Why you don’t like ‎‎to say anything about her in front of me?”‎

      ‎His face was colored and he didn’t know how to answer her question, so he ignored her and kept ‎‎looking towards his papers. ‎

      ‎Reem couldn’t bear herself from crying and she asked her father again begging him, “why father, why? ‎‎I am now old enough and I have the right to know everything about my mother. I don’t have any ‎‎memories about her except the old picture. At least tell me how she was, what she liked and what she ‎‎didn’t like and how was she? Please father tell me something, anything but don’t ignore me”.‎

      ‎“ I am just trying to protect you by not speaking about her in front of you”‎
      ‎“Protect me!! How you can protect me from my own mother?! I don’t understand, how, how?”‎ ‎" I didn’t want to deform the only memory of your mother” Her father started to talk angrily, “ Do you ‎‎want me to tell you that your mother runaway with another man. Do you want me to tell you that your ‎‎own mother is a bad mother and she left you for another man. Tell me, are you happy now?”‎

      ‎Reem couldn’t believe what her father just told her and she was frozen in her place. She tried to scream ‎‎“That is not true”. This news shocked her violently, her head became very heavy like a stone and ‎‎she saw her father moving his mouth but she couldn’t hear him. She tried to listen to what he was ‎‎saying but she felt a terrible headache and in a moment she couldn’t see her father anymore. ‎

      ‎“Reeeeeeeeeeeem”, he ran quickly to hold her hand..‎
      ‎“ Reem,,,Talk to me my child. Talk to me my dear” there was no respond from her, so he took her ‎‎quickly to the hospital. ‎

      wait chapter Seven:)
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    • Sorry for being late but i just recieved a chocking and horrible news in the early morning. $


      Chapter Seven

      ‎He met her abroad when he was studying, she was his colleague in the university. Soon she became his ‎‎sweetheart that both couldn’t be separated from their deep love despite the different cultures of both of ‎‎the dreamy lovers. The story of their love ended with a simple marriage with many dreams of love ‎‎waiting ahead in their romantic life. They built many dreams from their love and Reem’s mother ‎‎decide to scarify by leaving her own country to marry a man from a different culture although the big gap ‎‎between both cultures.‎

      ‎They settled in a small lovely house and their life was perfect like fairy tale. With God’s grace ‎‎they were happier to have their first beautiful child “Reem”. With the arrival of the new baby in the family, Reem’s ‎‎father decided to work hard to guarantee a good life for his family. He spent a lot of time outside home ‎‎and work very hard and as a result of that he could hardly have time for his wife and his little baby. He ‎‎used to leave the house, everyday very early in the morning and always return very late at ‎‎night.‎

      ‎Laura started to feel bored of her life, missing the past life and her country. Mainly she missed the ‎‎spark of love that gathered her with Khalil Al-khanoon when they were just in the beginning of their ‎‎love. She didn’t like to stay at home most of her time so she decided to go out from the house and try to ‎‎entertain herself and forget her boring life that was almost killing her. ‎

      ‎While she was doing some shopping, She met one of her old friends from back home. She was glad to ‎‎meet him and enjoyed his company. Her friend was also glad to have the pleasure of her company and ‎‎he started to get closer to her each time they met. He promised her happiness through his company and ‎‎he seduced her to be the happiest woman in the world with him. She was blind and just followed his ‎‎evil desires. Both of them shared the bed of betrayal and only the destiny that let Khalil returned one ‎‎day early to his home to take some documents that he forgot to find another man using his own bed ‎‎with his wife. ‎

      ‎He wished if he died rather than founding his wife cheating him and what was worse in their own bed. ‎‎The fire of jealousy and shame burned him alive. He couldn’t control himself at that moment and he ‎‎started kicking the man who dared to sleep with his wife and his own bed and Laura was crying guiltily ‎‎and was afraid what might happened. She was afraid that Khalil would kill her lover and at the same ‎‎time afraid of what will happen to her next.‎
      ‎“Please Khalil stop! Stop!” she cried bitterly‎
      ‎“Get out from my home, get out both of you dirty dogs. Get out or I’ll kill both of you. I don’t want to ‎‎dirt my hands with your stingy blood”‎
      ‎“Listen to me Khalil. Please listen to me and give me a chance”‎
      ‎“Get out from here you bitch and forget that you once was my wife and has a daughter”‎
      ‎“No, no Khalil! I can’t leave my daughter, I can’t”‎
      ‎“You already did” and he pulled her form her hair to the door and throw her outside and she was ‎‎begging him to give her another chance but he refused to listen to her and closed the door. ‎

      ‎“Why Laura, why, why? I can’t believe what I just saw. Oh god, why, why me” and then he heard the ‎‎crying of poor Reem who just lost her mother forever. He went to the bed and took his little baby in his ‎‎arms, close to his chest and hugged her tightly and cried with her like a child. Reem was also crying to hear the crying of her holder instead of lulling her.

    • Chapter Eight
      ‎In a dark room with a voice of a heart machine giving a sound of the heart’s movement. In the bed ‎‎there was a weak body with many wires. The body was there but the soul was in other world and never ‎‎knew anything about her own world. Reem was in a coma for almost a week now and her father stayed ‎‎most of the time besides her blaming himself for what happened to her. He was so pale, lost his ‎‎appetite and unable to sleep comfortably because the picture of Reem and her mother’s betraying him ‎‎were haunting him all the time like a ghost. ‎

      ‎“ oh God, help me and help my little child. Look what I have done to my own child, my angel. ‎‎Forgive me my dear child. I love you and I can’t live without you. You are the only hope of my life and ‎‎I can’t live without the hope of you being with me. Wake up my child and talk to me”. He hold her ‎‎small white hand and sobbed bitterly, the feeling of guilty and regret was torturing him very badly.‎

      ‎Reem’s father went to see her doctor and asked him about her condition. He went to the doctor’s office ‎‎and asked the nurse who was in the reception if he could meet the doctor and she answered him to go ‎‎directly to the office. He knocked the door and waited to hear the answer to get in. He heard a voice ‎‎telling him to come inside. When he got inside he found a different doctor.
      "I think I am in the wrong place, sorry” Reem’s father apologizing. ‎ ‎The young doctor asked him quickly: “ Are you looking for Dr Alexander?”‎
      ‎“Yes, do you know where is he?”‎ ‎
      "Dr Alexander will be away for a month”‎
      ‎“That is not possible! What about my daughter?”‎ ‎
      "I will be her doctor, and under my supervision”‎
      ‎“But you are young, I need Dr Alexander, I need an expert doctor to look after my daughter”‎
      ‎“Don’t worry sir, and I will do more than my best to look after her. Your daughter is in safe hands”‎
      “I don’t want to lose my daughter and I am not going to waste time. I will take her to have a treatment in the best hospitals in the world and I will not wait anymore”
      “You have the right to think about that because I know you are so worried about her but I don’t advise you right now to do this now for you might risk your daughter’s medical case”
      “The danger is that I am wasting time and watching her body getting weak and pale every moment and every day. I can’t see her suffering and dying slowly in front of me, I can’t, I can’t”. Reem’s father cried a lot and he wished if time went back and he could correct everything.


      The pretty smiles from Sarah’s pretty face vanished since she heard the bad news about Reem. Sarah tried to visit Reem but each time she visited her she was losing hope to see her friend again. She was praying that God will help Reem and let her get out from that long coma. Sarah couldn’t stay for long in the hospital because she couldn’t bear watching her friend in that case. However she tried to pretend being strong in the presence of Reem’s father and she tried to comfort Reem’s father by telling him that Reem will recover her health very soon. She tried to console him while she at the same time needed somebody to calm her and gave her a hope that her dear friend will be OK. Sarah’s mother tried to soothe her daughter and told her to be strong because Reem needs her more than any time at that moment. The soothing of her mother always gave her strength and hope.

      Reem’s father is asking Sarah: “So what are you going to study in the university?”
      Sarah answering sadly because she remembered when she planned with Reem to go and register together in the university: “I am going to study law”
      Khalil could not say anything else and he just remembered when Reem went down and told him that she wanted to be a writer. He exhaled painfully and cried: “Oh, my dear child when you are going to wake up and join your friend Sarah and achieve your dream to be a writer”
      Sarah couldn’t prevent her tears from falling and she also cried.



      Two weeks passed and nothing new in Reems's case. However, that day in the hospital Dr Ziad told the nurse to call Reem’s father to his office as soon as he arrive to the hospital.

      Khalil went soon to Dr Ziad’s office and he was worried from what he is going to hear from Dr Ziad. He knocked the door and Dr Ziad asked him to get in.
      Dr Ziad moved from his desk and went to welcome Khalil and told him to have a seat.
      “I have good news for you”
      “Did Reem passed the coma?” was the only question that Khalil thought about it.
      “No, she is still in the coma but her heart is stable now and one of the nurses luckily saw some movement in Reem's body as if she is dreaming and ready to respond with the outside surrounding life. So, we are hoping that she will get out from this coma very soon. And I want you to help us in order to pass this coma”.
      “I am ready to do anything, just tell me what shall I do? Do you want me to send her for another specialized hospital? Just tell me and I am ready to earn all my wealth to see my daughter healthy again”

      “Reem is getting better as we noticed her movement today. She was moving her eyelashes and her fingers but she didn’t wake up completely. Yet, these observations that we noticed upon her means that she is passing the coma. We need now to observe her most of the time and the most important thing we need to keep her away from any shocks in further time. We don’t want her to get mad or sad or anything that might disturb her. As we understood from you, this shock was the second one to her in a very short period and we are glad that she is passing this coma. So, we hope that you will know how to keep her away from stress or anything might bother her”

      “I will do my best and I will never let her have any shock. Thanks Dr a lot for telling me this happy news”

      wait Chapter nine


    • Hi again I hope that i am not late this time. I am waiting your comments and tell me how did you find the story at this stage?
      And what is your expectation for the last coming chapter? YOur comments are very important to me.

      Chapter Nine

      Silence was becoming the close companion to Reem who just woke up and found herself in a cold dark room, not the one she used to wake up in. Reem tried to ask herself and remember why is she in that place? Why she is not in her own room. She was afraid that she might be having a bad nightmare, and she hoped that in seconds she will wake up and find herself again in her beautiful brighten room with the big window that some lovely small twittering birds used to come and sing the sweetest songs. She closed her eyes and inhaled deeply preparing herself to wake up from that terrible nightmare. When she closed her eyes, a quick memory hit her like the lighting and she wished if she never remember or wake up. She tried to open her eyes again, but she didn’t have the strength to open them again and prefer to keep them close and never face the bitter truth again.

      After few minutes, she heard some heavy steps entering the room, and she could hear the breathing of the person. She felt him while he was sitting in the chair which is close to her bed. Then she smelled his perfume and she knew that smell because she smelled that perfume before that time. She tried very hardly to remember where she smelled before that time. Then she remembered and recognized that person from his perfume, but again she was confused and in a great bewilderment. "It seems that I am still dreaming. That is not possible he is coming again. I can't believe that Jamal is sitting near me now. I must be dreaming and imagining everything". For her great shock, she heard Jamal talking to her and she was happy but angry at the same time. She was happy that she is hearing the voice of her lover, the voice that let her feel that she is owing the world while she was with him. She was angry that he is back now after he deserted her and let her suffering. Anger was controlling her and she opened her eyes to face the eyes of Jamal's who was looking towards her sleepy body passionately and she soon said "Get out from here, I don't want to see you again in my life".
      Jamal was shocked to see Reem talking to him because he visited Sarah and after he insisted upon her to tell him about Reem, she told him everything happened to Reem when he left her and that Reem is now in coma. He was happy to see her fine and passed the coma. And he was shamed from himself and he didn't prepare for that moment. He didn't know that he will find Reem awake, and mostly her violent reaction towards him. He didn't know how to face her and apologize to her and is she going to forgive him.
      "My sweet Reem I am glad that you are fine now"
      "I said get out from here, and I don't want to see you here" Reem said with a serious and sharp voice.
      "Give me a chance baby, and listen to me"
      "I don't want to listen to you anymore and I don't want you again in my life". Reem voice started to rise and she was totally upset and agitated. Jamal was afraid that Reem might get hurt again and he promised her to get out soon from the room if she just calmed herself.
      "Who are you to promise you, you are nobody. Get out from my room, get out and I don't want to see you again in my life".
      Jamal got out from the room but he was surprised to see that Reem has totally changed. She even didn't cry in front of him as she did in the last time he left her. He kept asking himself, "is that possible that Reem I knew with the sensitive heart and feelings is the same one who shouted at me and get me out from that room. I can't believe that Reem has changed! Oh, what did I do to you my dearest Reem"? Jamal left the hospital and carrying with him the feeling of guilty for seeing Reem has totally changed and she became a different person with a hard heart not able to forgive.

      Khalil was informed soon by the happy news about Reem's condition. He couldn't believe them and he was totally happy. Yet, he didn't go soon to the hospital. He called Sarah at first and told her about the news he just received and Sarah's happiness was just the same like Reem's father. He decided to take with him Sarah because he was confused and afraid from facing and meeting his daughter after she was in coma more than a month. He felt that he is going to a court instead of visiting his own daughter in the hospital. He was afraid how Reem is going to face him, but he was afraid that his daughter might accuse him for pushing her mother away from her and never forgive him.

      It was raining heavily and she was staring from the window watching the scene of the rain falling heavily in the floor and the wind blowing and moved the heavy drops of rain towards her window. The sight is becoming difficult now and she tried by her little hands to wiped the mist out of the window in order to enable her to see the sight. She we wished if she could get out from her room and went outside and let the rain falls in her body. She missed going outside and she felt terribly loneliness. The door was knocked and Sarah she her head from the window and she screamed and ran towards Reem.
      "Oh, my dearest Reem, I missed you so much. Thanks God that you are fine and return again to us" She was hugging her tightly and both of them cried. They cried for being away all the past days. They cried of joy to see each other again.
      " I missed you Sarah and I was dying to see you. I felt terribly loneliness, I am so happy to see you"
      He was watching the meeting of these two girls and he was starring in his little daughter's face. He also wanted to run just like Sarah did, but he waited and waited till Reem could notice that he was in the same room.
      Sarah yelled: "how stupid I am, I forget that also your dad wants to see you. Come on my uncle. I am really sorry, forgive me"
      Reem turned her face and saw her father and she was stunned and didn't know what to say. She just remembered that last thing happened to her before she lost her conscious.
      "It is alright my dear, I know that you missed her so much as she did, Am I right". He tried to draw an artificial smile in his pale face and went towards Reem. He hugged her but she didn't do the same. She just kept silent as if her voice has vanished. Sarah didn't know exactly what happened between both of them before Reem falling down in the hospital She felt that she has to do something at that moment and let the father and his daughter spend sometime together.
      "I am so thirsty, I will go and get a bottle of water from the café of the hospital. Do you want anything to bring for you?"
      Reem just nodded her head by saying "NO", while her father answered gently, "NO, thank you. I don't feel thirsty"
      Sarah went out directly hoping that things will get better between Reem and her father.

      The room is getting silent now and Reem tried to avoid looking in her father's eyes. He went and brought a chair to sit facing her. He was intending to break the cold mountain which was set between both of them since long time. He wanted to get the passion of love from his own daughter. He is struggling now to bestow his daughter the love and happiness that he lost forever when he discovered the cheating of his lovely wife.

      “I know that you don’t want to talk to me but I have to talk and tell you something that nobody knew about it. I want you to listen carefully to me and never interrupt me till the end. Just listen and then you could say whatever you want to get it out from your heart. I just want you to give me a chance and forgive me and I wish I could fix everything and do things that we didn’t do at all in our life.”
      Reem didn’t even look to his face or talked and she was just looking down towards her hands and she was rubbing her fingers nervously.
      “Didn’t you wonder that I haven’t at all talked about my parents or my past life? I know that you just knew that my parents died long time ago and I was their only child. That is not true at all. I didn’t know at all who were my parents and I lived all my life as orphan never knowing anything about my parents. I lived all my past life in the orphanage and I just get out from it when I finished my studies and was able to work and be productive in the society but people never let me alone. They all start pointing towards me and devouring me with their eyes. They all knew that I was an orphan because it was a small town and everyone there know everything about each person live in that town. However, I was lucky to get a scholarship and continue my studies. I was really happy and you can’t imagine how happy I was because I couldn’t live in that same place. I felt that I am a stranger and everyone was pointing at me and calling me by the “Founding”. I really hated my life and wished dying rather than people looking at me as I am one of the criminals and my place is not there. I wanted to move from that area but I didn’t have enough money to move to other place. However, I was very determined to focus in my studies and forget my miserable life. When I get the scholarship, it was like the miracle for me to get out from the hell and go to the paradise. To go to some different new place where nobody knows anything about you is a blessing.”

      She moved now her opening dewy eyes towards her father who was telling her the whole story about his past and with all its pain. The first time in her life she sympathized with her father, touched his enormous suffering and wished if she could at that moment go and hug him, but she waited him to continue.
      He kept in recalling all the bitter events in his life and told his daughter about each second in his past life. "The best thing when you go to a new place that is nobody there knows anything about you. I was totally proud of myself and I felt confident about each step about each step I intended to do. But what was more helpful is that people were not looking at me the same look people in my old area used to look at me ignobility".

      Then he stood up from his place and went towards the window and looked towards the beautiful scene of nature but with absentminded then he said with a different stress in his voice, "her beautiful eyes attracted me from the first time I saw her. Her pretty smile and juggling with her friends let birds sing to see her. She was very friendly and she noticed me, YES, she noticed me and felt that my heart's pulsation was bumping loudly whenever I see her or hear her sweet voice. My heart was full of happiness and joy but I lost this sensation after she betrayed me and my heart became like a stone without feelings." He continued talking to her and his voice was choking him and he tried to stop his tears from falling, "I know that I wasn't fair with you. I should give you all the love that you lost from your mother. I shouldn't ignore you and look at you as if its your fault. I thought that I will never change and my heart with be just like a hard rock unable to fall. I thought I will never need for love again, but I am wrong, I am wrong. I need the love of my own daughter. I can't believe that my own daughter is stronger than me. You were able to face me to know the truth while I was trying to hide it all my life, I can't believe,,,"
      He sopped bitterly and it was the first time she saw him crying bitterly in front of her like a little child. He was crying and hiding his face with is two wild hands. Reem moved from her place and went directly to her father and she tried to sooth him. She was like a mother soothing her crying child but she cried with her father and she was saying with a weak voice, "I am sorry dad, I am sorry dad that I didn't try to understand you all my life".


      Wait the last Chapter but please give me your frank opinions.

    • Great

      I am truly enjoying your story


      The best part was when Reem kicked Jamal out of her room and was aggressive with him
      She truley needed to a shock in her life to make her stronger


      But i have a few comments, as a humble reader not as a critic :) , i feel that your story is a collection of few little stories. They are not very connected with each other. Now, this would be perfectly fine if it was a novel, but considering a short story, i feel that links have been lost between the events

      Hope you got what i mean

      we are impatiently waiting for the next Chapter

      :)

    • Mrs.Unfaithful كتب:

      Great

      I am truly enjoying your story


      The best part was when Reem kicked Jamal out of her room and was aggressive with him
      She truley needed to a shock in her life to make her stronger


      But i have a few comments, as a humble reader not as a critic :) , i feel that your story is a collection of few little stories. They are not very connected with each other. Now, this would be perfectly fine if it was a novel, but considering a short story, i feel that links have been lost between the events

      Hope you got what i mean

      we are impatiently waiting for the next Chapter

      :)



      Thanks dear a lot for your comments and that is what i really need to know. I just tried to give a little hints about each character in this story and I just focused in our heroin Reem. So, can you give me specific example about the links that have been lost between the events so i could go and improve it.

      Waiting your opinion :)

    • Scream كتب:

      Thanks dear a lot for your comments and that is what i really need to know. I just tried to give a little hints about each character in this story and I just focused in our heroin Reem. So, can you give me specific example about the links that have been lost between the events so i could go and improve it.

      Waiting your opinion :)


      :)


      For example
      The first part was about Ream and Jamal, how thier love was, thier brake up and then Reem's
      suffering from the brake-up

      then Reem's coma when she heard her mother's true story...

      So yes .. Reem is the heroin.. but each time she is in totally different scenarios that dont really link..


      Dont get me wrong, your story is great, its amazing honestly, and all the characters are well described and the events are interesting... but its just that in short story you have to have a stronger focus on one event... and the other events are just breifly on the side to create the
      scenario


      Just a humble view .. from a fan of yours

      :)

      By the way, how come you never mention Sally, Reem's sister???s

    • I just read the first chapter but it seems that the rest of the story is really interesting. I am really excited to read the rest of the chapters so just give me some time to read it and I will be back. #e

      Thanks dear Scream for sharing us this story and it seems that you have a good talent in writing. Wish you all luck.

    • It is really a wonderful story and I really enjoyed reading each chapter you posted here. Where is the last chapter I am so eager to read. Please please Scream I wanna know what will happen to Reem but I don't wanna to read a sad end ~!@@ad .

      Keep it up and please bring us the final chapter quickly. |a




      كيف انساك كتب:

      great topic brothere

      keep it on

      i reallt liked it

      i wanna see youre topic again and again




      It seems that somebody here didn't read the TOPIC or shall I say the story #e

      $$g