Sorry

    • Sorry

      Hi everyone
      I would like to share my words with you
      I hope that you will accept me and accept my pen
      I am not a poet or a writer
      but i am humman whose pen started to write
      his own feeling

      So I hope that you will comment and tell me your opinions$$7
      because i am now in my path of writing



      Sorry

      It is hared to realize
      That I was wrong all my life
      Wrong about you.

      I was lost in the world of dreams
      Searching for dreams
      Away from the evil which
      Belong to kids.

      I was wrong when,
      I push away, when
      I refuse to be you friend because
      I was afraid.

      I back with the memories
      And I find you there
      In each picture of my life
      You was there, when
      I cried, when I laughed
      You was just there
      In every moment in my life
      And I was away from you.

      The memorizes force me
      To realize that
      (you)
      Are my best friend

      It is just one word,
      That my heart wants to tell you
      And my tears wrote it deep
      In my heart with sorrow and regret
      Sorry
      Sorry for pushing you away
      From me all these years.

    • كاتب الرسالة الأصلية : Scream


      It is just one word,
      That my heart wants to tell you
      And my tears wrote it deep
      In my heart with sorrow and regret
      Sorry
      Sorry for pushing you away
      From me all these years.





      Nice words dear sister! Well done. I have to say that for me, this last part was the most touching. This is a really nice poem and a good start

      Now about the comments, well i dont thing am good enough to actually judge poetry nor poets!! All what i could see is just a few spelling mistakes (that you could've made during typing) and a few missing words here and there. Also, there is this thing about tenses that i am not sure about?! Mostly because my grammer isn't good enough, and Mainly because i was told that when it comes to Literature, tenses get to be treated in a special manner!! Maybe you can look into that and see what you can come up with!! I'll try to look into it myself and see if i can get back to you on it

      Anyway, in general, this is a really lovely poem with some wonderful, touching words. Keep it up and keep on writing. Just don't forget to share what you write with us, My regards|e

    • Thanks to all of you

      I really feel happy to see
      your lovely comments upon my words

      and you are really encouraging me to
      write more

      So i hope that you will my other topics
      and i will be glad to see your comments again
      Many thanx to Whisper, Anisah, The master and Bint Alkuwit

      I would like to share with you my post again after a help of a friend about the spelling and grammatical mistakes
      and i hope if any else have any other comments i will be glad if he or she tries to improve mine

      Sorry

      It is hard to realize
      That I was wrong all my life
      Wrong about you

      I was lost in the world of dreams
      Searching for dreams
      Away from the evil that
      Belong to kids

      I was wrong when
      I pushed away, when
      I refused to be your friend because
      I was afraid

      I go back with the memories
      And I find you there
      In each picture of my life
      You were there, when
      I cried, when I laughed
      You were just there
      In every moment of my life
      And I was away from you

      The memories force me
      To realize that
      (you)
      Are my best friend

      It is just one word
      That my heart wants to tell you
      And my tears wrote it deep
      In my heart with sorrow and regret
      Sorry
      Sorry for pushing you away
      From me all these years


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